Posted by: irisgodd3ss | June 20, 2007

Heading Home

I walk on the familiar footbridge to my bus stop. I breathe in the acrid fume-filled air, so different from the fresh breeze that passed through my lungs this morning, and my head throbs. I long for my hard mattress, my lone pillow, and the modicum of familiar things in my sparse little room.

I descend the steps to the street below, and then I see it – the 356, that elusive behemoth that offers the best route home. It has already started to pull out of the bus stop. Will I catch it in time? I know I must. It will be a long time before the next one comes along.

As it pulls into the outbound lane, I catch the bus driver’s eye. He could see in my eyes how desperately I longed to be in his bus. It was too late to stop, but he can slow down and I can run. And run I did. My right foot makes contact with the bus’s first step. So far, so good. I take another step. I almost lose my balance. What a travesty it would be to fall from a moving bus! I grab hold of the railing just in time. I pull myself up. I was in!

I look around. It must be my lucky day. There is a lone seat waiting for me. I sink gratefully into the bus seat with its torn upholstery and leaking cushions. I smile. I am going home.


Responses

  1. Haha. I could vividly imagine the scene. Chin is right, you write like a dream.

    Write more sweetie because you amuse me.

  2. Yeah, she writes like a dream, Rose. You know how sincere I am with praise. I don’t praise, unless I really mean it. Dear goddess, please work for me. Remember those figures I gave you? Please help me reach those. We can both live it up in style, you in BKK and me in Cebu.

  3. Awww, you guys! I’m blushing to my scalp. :-D

    Chin, of course I’ll work for you! And I promise I’ll meet those deadlines. ;-)

  4. BYou know I really shouldnt, I really shold just keep my big mouth SHUT! But sometimes I just cant help myself, for two reasons. 1) Becasue I read such an incredible of absolute shite and 2) becasue I like to share the benefit of my reading experiences with people who are obvioulsy talented with great stories. Sooooo . . . actually you know, the more I read this, the more I like it. Its very honest. I was gettgin ready to deliver all kinds of advice. and then I just read it again and thought to myself, actually its okay, and the voice isnt too cluttered up with all kinds of rubbish.

    I dont think this is her best though. I know she can do better – maybe a little less “I” and a littel more sights and sounds and smells. (And dont use acrid, I dont know what it means)

  5. Dear chicoblaze, I know you’re a demi-god in AZ and a god as far as Iris is concerned, but you’d have to be patient with me and not smite me with a thunderbolt because I disagree. I think this is wonderful.

  6. God? Nah, not me. Demi-god? Not according to anyone in this part of the world but I do read a LOT of stuff, I’ve taught a lot of writing, tooled around with a few manuscripts both good and bad. I think its wonderful too, sure enough, but Im gonna play pea-knuckle with you on this one and say that I know she can do better . . . you wouldn’t disagree with that would you?? :D

  7. CHIN: Thank you for coming to my rescue! This man, extremely sexy and lovable as he is, wants to make me the next Shakespeare when I’m happy trying to be the next Candace Bushnell. :-D
    MR. BLAZE: You know I’m crazy about you, but if my friends think its good enough, then it probably is. Remember, I write for them and for me. I’m not trying to sell books here. :-P

  8. What’s wrong with being Candace Bushnell? I’d give a pinkie to be Candace Bushnell. Mam, hapit na jud mi mulaag diha. I can’t wait. I’m excited to see you. Rose mentioned you might be giving teaching a go? Whee! I hope you teach, too, so I can drop by your class and wink at all your cute little male students. Gaah! I’m only 24, and already I’m in love with boytoys the way a 40-year-old woman would be.

    Please find me someone who’d play an eager graduate to my Mrs. Robinson. Rose’s Harley is, at five years old, too young methinks.

  9. Oh, I’d kill to be Candace Bushnell. :-D

    I substituted for a teacher who was in a coma all day yesterday. I taught 4 classes. It was unnerving, especially since it was my first time. I definitely want to try teaching. It wasn’t as bad as I expected. I actually enjoyed it. I suppose I can find you a boytoy but if you end up in the famous BKK Hilton, di na nako sala. Hahaha! Harley is too young but Hubert might be old enough. Of course, you’ll have to get parental consent. LOL. ;-)

  10. who’s candace bushnell?

  11. Babe, you don’t know who Candace Bushnell is? OMG! Where have you been all these years?

  12. did you take down some of the comments here iris?

  13. oops somethign is up with computer

  14. oh my god!!!! *insert serious giggling and squeeling here* is this HIM (wink, wink)…chin, i so envy you, you’re finally going to be goddess-pimped ! hahahaha!! guys, you owe me heaps and heaps of photos and kinky stories! spare me the kiddy ones!

  15. Ho! Ho! Ho! They let you teach some kids? How long will that last???

    The substitute will need subbing too soon …

    good luck balancing that with your crazy life …

    go girl … yabadabadoo!


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